It is a ubiquitous Creature; one which most people are familiar with. The Creature is typically disguised as a thin, steely box—often in plain sight. It tends to cling to walls and other flat surfaces, surrounded by squashy, cushiony surfaces in order to more effectively lure in its prey. It looks quiet, unable to do much harm—at first—which is part of its cunning capabilities. Once its prey is sitting, unaware, clouded in naivety, the Creature flickers slightly, the glowing of the Creature growing stronger with every second. Bright colors and enticing sounds draw its prey in more. The droning of this pervasive Creature is inescapable—an incessant buzz fills the ears of whomever is around. The droning is hypnotizing, sometimes exquisitely so. Once ensnared, the Creature’s prey is trapped, frozen in time and space. What is outside the Creature’s realm no longer matters; what is outside the Creature’s realm no longer exists. The Creature can only be controlled by a slim wand that is often buried underneath the surrounding cushions. However, even when the Creature's prey manages to still the monster with the wand, the pervasive influence of the Creature lingers, slowly spreading poison through its prey's mind and body. Even while silenced, it has a magnetic pull. It feeds on humans, mostly, of all shapes and sizes—human brains are its fodder of preference.
The Creature only has one enemy; much smaller, but even deadlier, known as the Cellular. The Cellular also feeds on human brains, and once the Cellular ensnares and begins feeding on its prey, the Creature no longer holds the same magnetic pull. The Cellular and the Creature constantly battle over the limited food supply of human brains, each attempting to ensnare the Creature with brighter colors or more enticing noises. The Cellular is even more dangerous than the Creature, as it is a parasite, often found clinging to its prey's hand or hip. It is also far more ubiquitous than the Creature is. It resembles a slim, metallic rectangle with a glowing front screen, and once its screen flickers on, the magnetic pull it emits is nearly impossible for its prey to extricate itself from. The cleverness of the Cellular lies in its ability to have its prey believe it is in control, that it wants the Cellular to be constantly attached, feeding on it. Humans who are ensnared by the Cellular become blank-eyed, helpless, and forget how to speak-- instead, emitting the occasional grunt or absentminded chuckle.
Many scientists have attempted to find a way to prevent the influence of both the Creature and the Cellular, and studies have shown that the only way to stop it is to completely detach from them. Only when humans realize the danger of these two monsters will they be able to remain safe.
This monster poem was so creative and really sheds light on the current realities. I loved how it incorporated the metaphor of a TV being a monster holding us captive every time we turn it on. I think you did a good job of making it sound poetic while still describing its characteristics. The picture included also added so much to the message of this poem. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteHi! I enjoyed reading this interesting take on the monster poem- you successfully transformed an everyday object into a scary beast. I also like the imagery, the mention of "droning" and "incessant buzz" really bring the static of TV to life. The encyclopedic quality is prominent, especially in the last line : "human brains are it's fodder of preference." I think this poem could be improved if it was a little longer. I would be interested to read about how the creature attacks once the human is hypnotized, or ways to protect yourself from attack. Also, in the third sentence, the word "surfaces" is mentioned twice. Replacing one with a different word might be more effective. Really nice poem!
ReplyDeleteI thought this was a great idea, and I love the image you found for this. I was just getting into the poem, though, when it ended! I really feel this one could benefit from being longer.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the early section where you described the phsyisical details of the monster/television. This is one area where you could do more, adding details about its appearance. I also wondered if you might want to bring in remote controls. Could be an interesting angle.
It also occurred to me that you might want to bring in a counter-monster: cell phones! The one thing that sucks peoples' attention even more than television. They two would make natural combatants in their monster worlds!
Hey! I really enjoyed reading this, though I wish it could be longer. Maybe mention where or how it finds its way into someone's home. Mention that it is a parasite that multiplies as more humans become dependent on it (sorry if these are bad ideas- I am just brainstorming). My favorite line is: " in order to more effectively lure in its prey" because it is a great description of the TV and really describes the environment (cushy pillows) of this monster as well as its predator nature in a quick sentence. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI love this! It's so cleaver and there's lots of alliteration that really works with the content. I would make it longer but elaborating about a situation that the creature causes or maybe providing guidance for humans to avoid the creature's lure
ReplyDeleteAMAZING IDEA! i think this is such a clever poem and really speaks to all the people who were raised in the 21st century.
ReplyDeleteit was great near the end where you made it very poetry like with a nice message.
the line i loved the most because of its creepy detail was “it tends to cling to walls and other flat surfaces, surrounded by squashy, cushiony surfaces in order to more effectively lure in its prey.” and i would suggest maybe adding more lines or terms like this!
AMAZING IDEA! i think this is such a clever poem and really speaks to all the people who were raised in the 21st century.
ReplyDeleteit was great near the end where you made it very poetry like with a nice message.
the line i loved the most because of its creepy detail was “it tends to cling to walls and other flat surfaces, surrounded by squashy, cushiony surfaces in order to more effectively lure in its prey.” and i would suggest maybe adding more lines or terms like this!